New and Improved Josh

by **Josh** Tue Oct 14, 2008 4:39 pm

I know I've been a bit braggy about how much I've improved since I first started RPing about 7 or 8 months ago. The first RPG I ever RPed on was Narutor. Anyways, here is a little post that I posted on Narutor one time...
"Pendo dodged it and kicked him in the face." and then I remember some crap about using the Kyuubi when I didn't have the Kyuubi. LMFAO, I was so terrible back then. xD anyways here are some posts I've made on this site in the past few days...

A sudden breeze briskly blew through the
crowded area of people. It was a time of parading, and celebration.
Everyone was excited and hurried around purchasing items such as quick
snacks, fake ANBU masks, and other nick-knacks. This place was normally
the place to go where you wanted vacation, which was why Josh came to
this place, and not a different place. He needed a break from all of
the training and missions he had been on lately. His bright eyes cut
through the crowd narrowing and piercing. He thought he had just saw
someone about twenty feet out.

Someone who didn't seem to be
from here, which tensed him. He acted like he didn't see anything and
stepped into the setting of the cool breezy area. Leaves rustled behind
his feet as he stepped forward left after right. His gaze turned and
rounded the area like a radar. His mind sketching the scenario like a
printer. He mapped out the area in his mind, and kept this in thought,
for it might come in handy later.

He kept it in his mind now,
but let it slip from his current line of thought and walked over to the
squid stand. "I'd like one adult sized, fried squid please." he said,
as it was given to him. He payed for it, and walked off into the
chattering crowd of people that seemed to go on for miles. The breeze
picked up causing the surrounding area to become for wavey. He sensed a
powerful presence. That of possibly a missing ninja.

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Josh felt a cold wave of wind come in, but
it wasn't from the weather. Josh payed more attention to it and noticed
that it wasn't the wind but a powerful source of chakra coming towards
him, and passing him. His eyes wandered to it and noticed what seemed
to be the source. It was a dark chakra but he wore a Konoha headband.

Josh's
eyes narrowed, such a dark chakra source couldn't be coming from a
Konoha ninja. Josh continued to walk a few more steps before coming to
a gentle halt. He swiped out his BINGO book, which was simply a green
book with a leaf symbol on the front. He looked through the pages, not
recognizing any of them to fit the resemblance of the ninja who had
just walked by him. He continued to flip through the pages until at
last he found a picture that very much looked to be the person he was
looking for.

'Hizashi Hyuuga...S rank Missing Ninja...'

he read aloud in his head.

'Why would an S rank ninja, especially one so powerful, walk in here without even a simple attempt at a transformation jutsu?'

he
thought, placing his BINGO book back in his pocket. His eyes flickered
back to Hizashi, and he watched him like a cat watching a mouse. He
would wait to try questioning him, for that could possibly set him off,
and Josh wasn't ready for a bystander to get hurt so he secretly, and
descreetly followed Hizashi.

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Josh continued to follow beginning to
become suspicious. He could feel it, that Hizashi had activated his
byakugan. It was a kind of feeling you get when your being watched but
not exactly looked at. His eyes tracked Hizashi's every move until
Hizashi threw a suspicious bottle into the crowd. Hizashi finally took
action.

Josh was slightly ready, but also slightly caught off
guard. He had to act quickly and forgot the bottle. "Desomaru!" he
shouted, unvaling his sword and blocking the two kunai that were coming
at him, while Desomaru jumped for the child, wrapping him up. The kunai
that had been heading for the child now simply clanked off of
Desomaru's steel back shell, and bounced off. Josh exhaled with relief
and Desomaru put the child down to run along back to his mom who stood
open armed.

They cheered but only for a second before Desomaru
took home back into Josh's backpack, and Josh flickered over to where
Hizashi stood in the forbidden forest. His eyes pierced with angered.
"Why are you here?!" he shouted, furiously. He wanted so badly to
attack him then and there but he knew there were too many lives at
stake, and he needed to learn how to control his temper, for if he had
been any angrier it would have set him off.

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As you can see, I have GREATLY improved. ^.^ Just thought I'd post that, since I'm so proud of myself, since most people still know me as the old "g-modding n00bish idiot" or something like that... =]

by **Usagi Aburame** Tue Oct 14, 2008 11:51 pm

well let me be the first to congratulate you here, (never knew you were called that or known as that) but anyways looks good glad that you are happy that you have made improvements, I am happy because there is even more chance of Rping with more people who don't one line, and also it makes me happy because people are happy about Rping and not about what info or how powerful they want to be and such good job again.
congrats
Tai ^.^